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The other me who wrote this
Lived far away and did things
I didn't

Rosy-fingered dawn peeled off a postcard
Wish you were here
Too bad I never mean it

Words that look good on paper
Never sing in your ears
Quite the way that Stevie did
Life is not in concert

Scribbled goodbye on a letter
Addressed to no one knows
Transfer paper doesn't work
On skin

Try again, same results

"Do or Die" means there's a choice
Preferred to paper or plastic

Built the bomb
Didn't light the fuse
Nerves only extend so far
From your hitchhiking thumb

Bloody Coward.
100 Themes Challenge, #38 "Abandoned"

Yeah, it's disjointed. So'm I. :giggle: The last line is the only reason to read this. It make-a me laff.

Still riding some mysterious high that may or may not have to do with Psych having a surprisingly poor kickoff and making me happy anyway.
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
...I like it. There's a punch behind it.
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Kid-Apocalypse Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2007
Thank you. Sort of corkscrew punch, ne?
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
if by that you mean you have to think about it, yeah.
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Kid-Apocalypse Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2007
More that it's confusing and sort of knocks you on your backside. ^^;
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
I dunno. A lot of good stuff is like that. I just read a stream-of-consciousness article on masterpieces. It made no sense at the beginning, especially since she only used the odd comma or period, her sentences were really long, and she tended to repeat herself. But once I got past that and thought about what she might be saying with those weird phrases of hers... it was really very cool.
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Kid-Apocalypse Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2007
That makes sense... I do like stream-of-consciousness.
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Paladin343 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
It was my first exposure to publishable stream-of-consciousness. I liked it.
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Mayaj Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2007
Yahikes.
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Kid-Apocalypse Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2007
Why?
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Mayaj Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2007
painful.
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