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need CONSTRUCTIVE criticismBaya'al Docea, a middle-sized Class D planetoid orbiting a single sun with two tagalong moons and enough statistics to fill a good 512sm of space in a planetary guide app, even with an image or two. Moderate population for a Class D world, heavy trade, mainly exporting food, alcohol, and bored teetotalers. From space, it looked like a greeny-blue marble with some swirly bits, the sort that a greedy kid might knock out someone's teeth in the name of stealing it.
It was occupied, of course, but everything this far from the Periphery could say the same for itself. Even people's minds, say the cynical. I flipped my reader so that it clicked into its open state and then tapped the tip of my finger against the upper right corner. A drop-down menu flickered onto the screen, I dragged my finger down the list of bookmarks until Baya'al Docea's link came into view.
There was the entry, just as I remembered it the last time fifty thousand tim
Progess : LitAs an exploration of how much my writing has changed over the past (almost) nine years, here is a snippet from a story that I wrote when I was fifteen, followed by that same snipppet rewritten very recently.
Suddenly there was a loud and vicious snarl. Everyone jumped up and stared at the door, which seemed to be the only barrier between them and the whatever it was. Jason searched his pockets for a few moments and retrieved a large rock. Before anyone could protest, he dashed to the door and opened it.
Gasps and utterances of disgust and surprise heralded the unveiling of the gruesome creature in the doorway. It looked like a pile of blue ooze with flecks of red and orange. It had no claws or teeth, or even eyes for that matter. But the stench of the beast was staggering. It smelled as though someone had gathered together every offensive odor in existence.
A vicious snarl cut through the happy chatter in the room like a knife dropped onto a glass floor. No on
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